Draft 4 and Evaluation

Teacher's feedback:

WWW:

-         Great music

-         Establishing shot

-         Great shots of getting ready - dressed

EBI:

-         Scene of them in the bed – use wider range of shots

-         Close up (extreme) of phone – to see who is calling

-         Editing getting out of bed is quite quick

-         Lipstick scene – closer to the lips (extreme close-up)

-         Maybe do something with the hair?

-         Inconstant sounds in the background – should’ve low music in the background

-         Wider range of shots when she’s walking

-         Voiceover – no diagetic sound in the background – just voiceover with low music

-         Longer shots of photos – in focus

Mark: 41/60

Level: 3


Teachers Evaluation:

Short and Long Term Plan for Draft 4

This plan will help us manage our time properly for the filming and editing.  

Short Term Plan

Date	Equipment	Location	Actors/Costumes + props	Scene Description
10/04/11	Camera, tripod and lights.	Willesden Green library - road and house.	Linda  and Micheal - dress, wine, tights, phone, pictures.	Scene 1 - Linda and Micheal in bedroom. Scene 2 - Linda in the street, phone call and photos.

  Long Term Plan

Week 1 from 7th April	Week 2	Week 3
Evaluation of third draft. Start filming.	Start editing the draft. Film again if necessary.	Finish opening sequence and finish evaluation.

Filming - photos

These are some photos of our preparation and filming of the drafts.

   

Draft 3 and Evaluation

Feedback :
· Titles – in the way? – smaller? 
· Title – what is Linda? – seems like character introduction
· Still need closer shots
· Jump shots
· Looking at camera

· More shots of the phone
· Dafne – putting the dress on – strap – back shot
· Stocking – black – over the knee
· Blurry – Dafne – Red lipstick
· Shot for putting the lipstick – too long
· Shot of him whispering she don’t love him – (whisper) more closer
· Music should continue when no dialogue
· More shots of down the street
· Pulling the phone – who is she calling
· Not really an opening sequence – short film

Overall Grade : mid 2
Overall mark : 31-32


Teachers evaluation:

Short and Long Term Plan for Draft 3

This is a Plan for Draft 3 to help my group to manage our time with the filming and editing.

Short Term Plan

Date	Equipment	Location	Actors/Costumes + props	Scene Description
5/04/11	Camera, tripod and lights.	Willesden - house and road.	Linda  and Thomas- dress, wine, tights, phone, pictures.	Scene 1 - Linda and Micheal in bedroom. Scene 2 - Linda in the street and phone call.
6/04/11	Camera and tripod.	School - for office scene	Micheal - suit, phone and office equipment.	Scene 3 - Micheal on the phone to Linda.

 Long Term Plan

Week 1	Week 2	Week 3
Evaluation of second draft. Start filming.	Start editing the draft. Film again if necessary.	Finish opening sequence and finish evaluation.