Draft 2 and Evaluation

WWW
Music was good.
The man was more in the shots.
Linda was more seductive than draft 1.


EBI
Match on action.
Outside scene :
               - conversation on the phone with her husband.
Voiceover inconsistent needs to be clearer and the whisper [extreme close up shot]
More varied shots.
Linda needs to be more. 
             - seductive 'bitchy', silk clothing when she gets out of bed. 
             - when she's getting dressed Linda could be sliding her dress on.
Wine glass with lipstick mark.
Linda pulling up stockings make it more seductive.

Short and Long Term Plan for Draft 2

The plan will manage our time equally for the filming and editing.
  Short Term Plan

Date	Equipment	Location	Actors/Costumes + props	Scene Description
16/03/11	Camera, tripod and lights.	Willesden, house.	Linda  and Micheal - dress, wine, poison, ring.	Scene 1 - Linda and Micheal in bedroom.
18/03/11	Camera, tripod and lights.	Willesden, house.	Linda and Micheal - dress, suit, phone, ring.	Scene 1 - Linda and Micheal in bedroom.

   Long Term Plan

Week 1 from 10th March	Week 2	Week 3	Week 4 To 24th March	Week 5
Evaluation of first draft. Start filming.	Start editing the draft. Film again if necessary.	Finish editing.	Film over the scenes that needed work on.	Evaluation. Start filming third draft and editing appropriately.

Music - copyright

As the music that my group want is copyrighted I had to sent an email to the producer of the music to ask permmision to use it in our opening sequence.

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Draft 1 and Evaluation

EBI:

Way to dark – Lighting is the main problem

Voiceover – Echo

Guy in the bed confusing – Voiceover doesn’t match what she’s doing

Awkward pauses

Lipstick scene – you can’t read it. Make it far more scandalous

Music – needed to set the mood

Voiceover – continuously

Place – far more busy – exciting - show other men looking at her.

Titles should be through out

Beginning – Use more match on action – walking

Where the cigarette did came from? – Continuity

Props – Wine – Juice?

Confusing ending – Not sure what will happen to the rest?

Not meeting enough film noir conventions

-         Not black and white (Okay for now, till we use premiere editing program)

-         Strong contrasts of lighting

-         Women – isn’t powerful enough.

WWW:

Good effort in costume

Overall mark: 26/27
Overall level: 2


Teachers evaluation:

Short and Long Term Plan - Draft 1

This plan will help my group to manage time for filming and editing draft1.
   Short Term Plan

Date	Equipment	Location	Actors/Costumes	Scene Description
02/03/11	Camera and tripod.	Willesden, house.	(Linda) - coat, dress, high heels,ring, wine, cigarette and glass.	Scene 3 - Linda walks back home and goes into kitchen to drink wine.
05/03/11	Camera and tripod.	Willesden, house and road.	(Linda) - dress, cigarette, coat, heels, ring. (Micheal)	Scene 1 - Linda and Micheal in the bedroom. Scene 2 - Linda walking in the street.

    Long Term Plan

Week 1	Week 2	Week 3	Week 4	Week 5
Film, prepare the props. Film the scenes.	Editing towards the draft. Film again if necessary.	1st draft due - edit and get feedback.	Film over the scenes that needed work on.	Film and edit to keep up with the deadline.

imovie - newer version

My group are going to be editing on the new Mac's which has the new imovie and Adobe premiere editing program therefore we have been looking at tutorials on their websites to help us get to know how the program works.

For our first draft we will be using the imovie although later on we will be working on premiere. To be able to use the program we have downloaded the free trail onto our own computers therefore we could practice editing at home.