EBI:
Way to dark – Lighting is the main problem
Voiceover – Echo
Guy in the bed confusing – Voiceover doesn’t match what she’s doing
Awkward pauses
Lipstick scene – you can’t read it. Make it far more scandalous
Music – needed to set the mood
Voiceover – continuously
Place – far more busy – exciting - show other men looking at her.
Titles should be through out
Beginning – Use more match on action – walking
Where the cigarette did came from? – Continuity
Props – Wine – Juice?
Confusing ending – Not sure what will happen to the rest?
Not meeting enough film noir conventions
- Not black and white (Okay for now, till we use premiere editing program)
- Strong contrasts of lighting
- Women – isn’t powerful enough.
WWW:
Good effort in costume
Overall level: 2
Teachers evaluation:
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